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Returning home

  • 26th Jun, 2006 at 11:45 PM
My apartment is damp
from the racks of hanging laundry.
It smells of soap
and clean
and far off places.

I walk out on the balcony,
but it's no better.
I sit
and contemplate the mist
that falls on my beloved city.

Droplets fall in the distance.
You can hear them splash into puddles.
In the busy night.

Across the gap,
the neighbour's window is bright with light.
The shades are up and the cats are gone.
Inside, I see papers litter the oaken floor.
Stacked against a wall are half-filled boxes.
They're moving out.

A bird lands on the railing and looks at me.
For an instant
or two.
Before it flies off.

Simon Law
26 June 2006, 11:54.
Montréal, QC.

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sfllaw
27th Jun, 2006 18:12 (UTC)
Thanks. :)
le_maistre_e
27th Jun, 2006 17:09 (UTC)
Now that is Montréal in late June.

Perfect. You must find a place to publish that so that more people can read it.
sfllaw
27th Jun, 2006 18:11 (UTC)
Oh no! My poetry isn't ready for publishing. Not at all.

I'll work on it for a couple more years.
le_maistre_e
27th Jun, 2006 19:58 (UTC)
But that was gorgeous !!

Please get your name out there. You have a very beat style about you. All you need is the backwards beret, the dark glasses and the bongos !!
angorian
28th Jun, 2006 13:52 (UTC)
A bit of constructive criticism:

I found the stanza's a bit disjoint and not forming a cohesive whole. I think the last one makes a good poem all on its own.
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